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Matt Bellamy

  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Maybe...

    Hello! Parts of this sound very pleasing. Specifically, the beginning and the end. The middle, not so much. The first two lines, I can relate to, and I like the ...

    Jan 17, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Black History

    Hello! There are two main problems I see with this, as it is now. The first is that it doesn't really look like a poem. The only thing indicating that ...

    Jan 17, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hues of Blue

    Hi there! I quite like your poem. The rhyming scheme is good and it flows well. It also sounds wonderfully melancholy at the end. However, the only thing I'm uncertain ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Death by Lyricism

    Hey, Octo! Firstly, I really like your tone. I love how you refer to money and pity, and the contrast of feelings between the crowd and the narrator. The italicised ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Storm

    Hello, Mo! Firstly, sorry if I repeat anyone, I don't read other people's reviews before I review work myself. I like this poem. Your imagery is good and very descriptive, ...

    Nov 11, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Good BYe my "Friends"

    Hey there! I really felt the emotion in this poem. Also, I like the metaphor in the title. And since it's a metaphor, you don't need the quotation marks so ...

    Nov 11, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: e minor

    Ooh, I like this! I really feel like music has such emotional importance, both playing and listening, so I definitely approve of this poem. Firstly, I like the way it ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: save my vanity(edited not much but cleaned up)

    Hello! The first thing I notice about this poem is the elipses everywhere. I don't think they are necessary in any part of the poem and they distract the reader ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Floating

    Hello! This is quite a pleasing poem. The blue does make it a bit difficult to read, though. I was a bit concerned at first because you seemed to be ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Ghost Season

    Hello! I really like this poem. It flows beautifully, the rhyming is not forced at all and it skips along nicely. It's also very strong - vivid description and it's ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: A lonely bus stop

    Hey there! I like the concept of this poem. A couple of things, though: A lonely bus stop Soon comforted by someone sitting This sounds a little strange because there ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Eyes Of an Angel

    Hello! This has potential, it just isn't very strong at the moment. First, a few niggly things: I think the elipses at the end of the fourth line are unnecessary. ...

    Nov 8, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: norina's poem (i still miss you)

    Hello! I don't tend to read what other people have said already, so apologies if I'm repeating anybody. Let's go! The night she died was one worth remembering, it was ...

    Nov 3, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Can you hear me?

    Hello! This has potential, just a few things though: I'm sick of being anonymous. Hiding in the depths of dark. The full stop at the end of this sentence makes ...

    Nov 3, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Last Breath Reminiscence

    Hello! This is a very interesting piece. There are a few ideas in here which I think could definitely be expanded on. For example, the "melancholy blossom who always smiles" ...

    Nov 2, 2009


pain is that feeling when you are feeling hurt, but it never goes away leaving me hurt. oh it hurts.
— Dragonthorn